Thursday, December 13, 2007

Deadline #16 HW#1

Brennan Dardis

Eng102 D.Adams

12/13/07

Class Portfolio

Research Proposal

In the current age of professional and non-professional sports, athletes are finding ways to enhance their bodies. Steroids and other supplements such as human growth hormone (HGH) have been a major topic in the sports world. Most prominently baseball has been taking harsh criticism from not only the media but the US government as well. The problem with these sports enhancing drugs is that they are so tempting to be used by athletes has they not only have the ability to strengthen their bodies in numerous ways, but possibly aid them in recoveries and their longevity of their careers. Since I am an avid baseball fan I am posing my research question as, "should sports enhancing supplements, most importantly steroids, be allowed to be controlled by licensed physicians in the current day and age of baseball?"

After the baseball strike in 1994, baseball as seen an influx in offense, resulting in increased revenue for baseball as a whole and more importantly the individual owners of the teams. In 1973, the American League adopted the designated hitter rule (DH), which allowed a hitter to take the place of the pitcher, which in turn increased offensive numbers in the American League. As most sports fans would attest, seeing runs/points/goals scored is more exciting to watch than no offensive output. Therefore there is an implied calling for increased numbers in professional sports, and in the case of baseball that equates to more home runs, stolen bases, strikeouts and almost any other category logged in the game.

My goal of this research project is to address all the negative connotations of sports enhancers as well as all of the positives with the hope of concluding in a happy medium of moderated sports enhancers. My audience is intended for sports fans as a whole, but more directly towards baseball advocates. However, since modern medicine has numerous uses for steroids/supplements in the normal world, my audience could include those interested in health professions as well.

Aiding me in my research I will undoubtedly be using numerous sports journals/magazines as well as journals/magazines that are health related as I will need background information on specific supplements/steroids. I plan on focusing on 3 or 4 supplements/steroids to have a good range of pros and cons for the use of each of them. One interesting thing I have to my advantage is that although I am only a blogger for the purpose of this class, I do read numerous sports blogs daily and will be able to ask myself more questions related to my research question with the ability to research on specific events/information. I also plan on digging up interviews with specific ballplayers to further aid me with my argument.

This research paper will take a large amount of work due to the specificness to the sport of baseball alone, but I feel that will only be a positive as it will be more focused. One thing I will need to pay attention to during this process is the current events in the sports world as steroids/supplements are mentioned almost every day. I plan on doing most of my research from home using the online capabilities of the library but will try to include as many books that are published on the subject to balance out my sources.

Steroids In Baseball

What keeps fans going to the ballpark? Is it the atmosphere, the food, the live entertainment? Baseball has been a storied sport throughout American history and touches millions of lives throughout the country. Most young boys grow up playing the sport and therefore have a closer relationship with it. However nostalgia and gimmicks alone are not what perpetuates baseball as a business, it’s the record of the home team. Everyone knows that in almost all sports putting up a higher score means victory. In baseball this comes in the form of runs produced. In recent years offensive output has been increased throughout the league and has been linked hand in hand with the ever so controversial subject of steroids. Are they good for the sport or are they bad for the sport? In conjunction with proper medical and legal guidance steroids would be a benefit for baseball as they would, improve the athletes mentally and physically, they would aid in longevity and recovery times, and lastly they would increase revenue throughout baseball.

One of the main reasons, if not the main reason a ballplayer would use steroids would be for the benefit of increased muscle mass. When one mentions steroids in conjunction with baseball, they are referring to anabolic steroids, steroids that mimic the male hormone, testosterone. Testosterone is one of the main hormones that stimulates muscle growth, hence the desire to take steroids. Astonishingly anabolic steroids can add 6.6 to 11 pounds of muscle after several weeks of use (Pampel 58.) Typical brands of anabolic steroids are Equipoise and Deca-Durabolin (Pampel 60-61.) More muscle mass in turn with proper exercise can generate more speed and power for a ballplayer, two essential tools for producing runs. Besides sheer increase in muscle mass, steroids increase confidence in ballplayers. This is twofold as steroids increase aggressiveness but can also influence a placebo effect in which a ballplayer would feel like he is using every means possible to better himself (Pampel 46.) Combining strength and confidence, steroids create Über-athletes. Take for instance Barry Bonds. When he came into the league as a rookie he averaged one homerun every 25.8 at bats. Whereas just three years ago (2004) incredibly Bonds averaged a homerun every 8.3 at bats (McCloskey 68.)

Another crucial benefit of steroids is their ability to help ballplayers recover faster from injuries and their ability to lengthen the careers of ballplayers. Since speed and agility are crucial in baseball, wear and tear occurs throughout a ballplayer’s career. From simple to severe muscle strains (tears in a muscle’s fibers), anabolic steroids quicken the recovery process. As one baseball player puts it, “I’m in pain all the time, every (expletive) in here is on something” (Carroll 26.) A violent swing of the bat can sprain anything from a calf muscle to a pectoral muscle, everyday occurrences in the life of a ballplayer. As a ballplayer grows older they become more susceptible to injuries, the sad fact of aging. However, middle-aged ballplayers are able to have longer careers as minor injuries can be overcome faster.

Thinking outside the individual, steroids would benefit the economical side of baseball, creating more money for everyone from the laymen of the organization to the city or state in which the team resides. Baseball is a sport but it’s also a business. For genuine fans of a team or the sport, winning might not be everything, but for fair-weather fans, winning is crucial. Take for instance a franchise like the Kansas City Royals. Since the early 90’s they’ve had one of the worst home attendance records, and by no surprise, they’ve also had one of the worst records as well. Since 2000 the Royals have lost 60% of their games and have ranked in the bottom three of all baseball franchises in attendance, this year just less than 20,000 fans a game, only 48% of the total capacity. On the other hand, take the San Francisco Giants and Mr. Steroid himself, Barry Bonds, they averaged just shy of 40,000 fans a game, 95% of their total capacity. (ESPN)

Although steroids could be very beneficial for baseball, there is also a downside to them as well. First and foremost, as with most drugs, there is the possibility of addiction and overdosing. While steroids are not stimulants or depressants like cigarettes or alcohol, users can continue usage due to their positive effects on their bodies. However some of the side effects that steroids can cause include strokes, heart attacks, liver and kidney complications, shrunken testicles, depression, and even sudden death (Egendorf 12). Besides the unusual health complications steroids can cause, they can also diminish the integrity of the sport. Ballplayers in the early 20th century didn’t have access to steroids and therefore there are many who believe that modern players should stick to the game the way it was designed. As George F. Will states, “They (baseball players) should try to perform unusually well. But not unnaturally well. Drugs that make sport exotic drain it of its exemplary power by making it a display of chemistry rather than character – actually, a display of chemistry and bad character” (Egendorf 19.)

There are some very serious health and mental complications that can occur with steroid users, and no doubt without a collective supporting and regulating steroids, the integrity of the game would be changed. However, health complications can be minimized, and/or avoided with medical supervision and proper usage. And as far as the integrity of the game, it could be held in place if steroids were made available to all players. After all, cheating has been a part of baseball since its inception, hence the invention of the curveball and the corked bat.

Under the proper rules and regulations and proper testing times, steroids can only be beneficial for athletes. For the enjoyment of the sport one writer (Tom Verducci) puts it best when he said, “In 1998 a 70-year-old man would have seen a major-leaguer hit 60 home runs in a season only once in his lifetime. By the time the man was 74, the feat had occurred six more times, all by players accused in the court of public opinion of having used performance-enhancing drugs” (Pampel 48.) Clearly there can be no coincidence. Numbers don’t lie.

Bibliography

Carroll, Will. The Juice. Chicago: Ivan R. Dee, 2005.

Egendorf, Laura K. Steroids. Farmington Hill, MI: Greenhaven Press, 2006.

ESPN.com (for statistics)

Fainaru-Wada, Mark. Game of Shadows. New York: Gotham Books, 2006.

Jost, K. (2004, July 23). Sports and drugs. CQ Researcher, 14, 613-636. http://library.cqpress.com/cqresearcher/cqresrre2004072300.

McCloskey, John. When Winning Costs Too Much. Lanham: Taylor Trade Publishing, 2005.

Pampel, Fred. Drugs And Sports. New York: File on File Inc, 2007.

Worsnop, R. L. (1991, July 26). Athletes and drugs. CQ Researcher, 1, 513-536 http://library.cqpress.com/cqresearcher/cqresrre1991072600.

Cover Letter

This semester’s research project was certainly a new experience for me. I have never taken an online/hybrid course before. Needless to say it was confusing, frustrating, yet informative and fun.

What I felt I did well at for this research project was the actual research I did and my attempt at writing a unique stance on a controversial topic in sports. I went to two different libraries for my research, here at MCC and the Tempe public library. I was able to find five useful books for my research on top of the myriad of information on the internet. Spreading out the research project throughout the semester was a great asset as not every source is available at the time you need it. I challenged myself to go outside the norm and write a paper in favor of steroids. Although I agree with the points I made, if I was the commissioner of baseball, I would ban steroids and all of those individuals using them. It was a lot harder to find material in favor of steroids but I enjoyed the process.

Unfortunately there were problems with my research project as well. First of all my lack of meeting several deadlines was very detrimental. Computer access became an issue for me at the start of October due to moving. One thing I really liked about the class was the peer reviews and I was not able to take advantage of that for my WP#3. I also could have done a lot more grammar activities to better my own writing instead of just looking at and learning the topics. However I felt I met the course guidelines as listed below.

Course competency #1 was to be able to write for specific rhetorical contexts which I felt was mastered in deadline #3. I learned how to narrow down a topic, form a purpose, and to be able to write without bias and to keep the audience intended for in mind. Following the homework assignments in deadline #3 this was accomplished. The most difficult aspect of writing for me is to be able to not let things that I believe in affect my writing.

Course competency #2, the ability to organize ones writing was shown throughout the course. WP#1 was the epitome of this as it forced us to decide our topics early on and to lay out a schedule. Organizational skills of WP#3 were aided by the Toulmin outline idea. Although I did not make a cluster map, I understood the use of this as well. Both of these exercises enable one to support the main topic more with specific ideas/facts. In the future I plan on using a cluster map and then transfer my ideas into an outline.

Course competency #3 emphasized the ability to use consistent voice, tone, diction, grammar, and mechanics. Both Everythings an Argument and the Bedford Researcher had great examples of proper writing conventions. However I felt that by reading others/correcting others writing projects we were able to put the mechanics into work. The grammar girl website was useful at times, but most everything was covered in the books.

Course competency #4 stressed the ability to not only obtain sources, but to sort through them by credibility, relativity, and their currency. There were several sources that I found in the library that were either biased or all one-sided, therefore I mainly used the sources that credited the other side of my topic (steroid usage in baseball). I also tried to find the most recent sources as I came across a few books from the 70’s and 80’s on steroids, obviously being outdated. This competency was shown by writing projects #2 and #3. One other beneficial part of this class was the library tour where we learned how to use the online research catalogs. Most of these sources were current, but you could sort by almost any category giving you numerous materials.

Course competency #5 was the ability to integrate the sources you found into your paper. The tricky thing about this aspect was to use the material you found without plagiarizing the source. Quoting a source was the easiest method, and one that I have been familiar with since elementary school. However being able to paraphrase or summarize is a lot harder way utilizing a source, yet many times can be better for a paper as it isn’t as dry as a direct quotation. Another difficult part of integrating a source is being able to cite it correctly using MLA format. This was able to be done through the handout given in class as well as the Bedford Researcher. I feel that from WP#3 I learned how to properly cite a source as well as correctly using the information.

Course competency #6 is essentially tied into #5 as it addresses the proper usage of citing a source. I for one did not know the correct way of citing internet sources and all the information I needed was provided by the handout and Bedford Researcher. In high school I used MLA and APA so my ability to write a bibliography was always somewhere in between. I plan on keeping the Bedford Researcher as a way to keep my memory fresh.

Course competency #7 was the ability to give and use feedback from our peers. I felt that the peer review option through Google Documents was a great way to communicate with one another. I don’t know about others in the class, but even though I only received a handful of comments, I looked at almost everyone’s WP#3 to serve as a great template for problems/errors that could have been evident in mine.

Course competency #8 was the ability to assess my own abilities as a writer. I feel that this is constantly changing depending especially on what classes I am currently taking and the mood that I am in. However I felt that this class was an excellent refresher class for basic grammar skills and writing conventions. I for one certainly needed help with my ability to find, use, and cite sources and this class certainly addressed that. I think in today’s world of spellchecking and “do it yourself” attitudes, many important English skills are lost.

Lastly competency #9 addressed the ability to use technology with ones writing. Before this class I really only used the computer for typing papers and reading sport scores. From this class alone I have learned how to use online catalogs, peer reviewing via Google Documents, and blogging as a means of communication. Although many of the times using the blog site was a hassle, I feel that I can now use it as a tool in the future for other things besides writing.

All in all it was a great learning experience and I feel more confident about writing a research paper in the future.

Thursday, December 6, 2007

Deadline #15 HW#2

Wow. Apparently my cover letter was completely different than everyone else, and not in the good way. I will definitely have to go back and change it to breaking down the course objectives. I'm not very familiar with hyperlinks but I will try to insert these as well. I went and looked at almost everyones cover letters for references so that I can go back and correct mine for the final. I left comments on the letters of Paulette, Stephann, and Justin. All were very well written with very few mistakes. Its very advantageous to see correct examples of WP#4. I thought it was funny the comment Coralee left me saying it was a beautiful letter but not the correct letter!

Deadline #15 HW#1

Commented/revised on the cover letters of Stephann, Paulette, and Justin.

Thursday, November 29, 2007

Deadline #14 HW #1

Brennan Dardis

Eng102 D. Adams

11/28/07

Cover Letter

This semester’s research project was certainly a new experience for me. I have never taken an online/hybrid course before. Needless to say it was confusing, frustrating, yet informative and fun.

What I felt I did well at for this research project was the actual research I did and my attempt at writing a unique stance on a controversial topic in sports. I went to two different libraries for my research, here at MCC and the Tempe public library. I was able to find five useful books for my research on top of the myriad of information on the internet. Spreading out the research project throughout the semester was a great asset as not every source is available at the time you need it. I challenged myself to go outside the norm and write a paper in favor of steroids. Although I agree with the points I made, if I was the commissioner of baseball, I would ban steroids and all of those individuals using them. It was a lot harder to find material in favor of steroids but I enjoyed the process.

Unfortunately there were problems with my research project as well. First of all my lack of meeting several deadlines was very detrimental. Computer access became an issue for me at the start of October due to moving. One thing I really liked about the class was the peer reviews and I was not able to take advantage of that for my WP#3. I also could have done a lot more grammar activities to better my own writing instead of just looking at and learning the topics.

All in all it was a great learning experience and I feel more confident about writing a research paper in the future.

Thursday, November 8, 2007

Deadline #11 HW#3

This week was good for two reasons. One it helped see the possibilities I have for writing an introduction and a conclusion, and secondly I was able to see others takes on what they got from the intro/conclusion excercise. I now have over 12 highly usable sources but am having a hard time debating on which ones I want to use in the exact spot in my paper. There are so many stories and quotes I just don't know which ones to use! Overall the process is still going well though, hope everyone has a good weekend!

I posted on:
Kathy DL#11 HW#2
Coralee DL#11 HW#2
Stephann DL#11 HW#1
Justin DL #11 HW#2 and DL #11 HW#3

Deadline #11 HW#2

Intro #1

What keeps fans going to the ballpark? Is it the atmosphere, the food, the live entertainment? Baseball has been a storied sport throughout American history and touches millions of lives throughout the country. Most young boys grow up playing the sport and therefore have a closer relationship with it. However nostalgia and gimmicks alone are not what perpetuates baseball as a business, it’s the record of the home team. Everyone knows that in almost all sports putting up a higher score means victory. In baseball this comes in the form of runs produced. In recent years offensive output has been increased throughout the league and has been linked hand in hand with the ever so controversial subject, steroids. Are the good for the sport are the bad for the sport? In conjunction with proper medical and legal guidance steroids would be a benefit for baseball.

Intro #2

September 8th, 1998 was a date that rekindled the magic in a sport that seemed to be dying slowly. Baseball, the great American sport just four years removed from a strike that led to no postseason was being overtaken by football and basketball and little money was being put into teams except for the larger cities. Then came along a Mr. Mark McGwire and a Mr. Sammy Sosa. Throughout the 1998 season these two sluggers belted homeruns at an alarming rate inching themselves towards the season single homerun record of 61 set by Roger Maris in 1961. Both ended up breaking the record and they captured the attention of all of America. How did these two sluggers do it? The dark horse of baseball, steroids, seemingly held the answer. With larger muscles, and faster recovery times, baseball seemed to be picking up steam offensively. Although viewed by almost all as corrupt and dangerous, they do have their benefits for baseball players.

Conclusion #1

Who knows what can be possible for athletes at the 21st century moves on. Almost certainly though there will be a demand by the players themselves and their fans indirectly for uber steroids/supplements. Just imagine if medical technology could lead to super sight and super reflexes, athletes would be spider men and supermen. One thing is for sure though if regulated and controlled, the athletes of the future could be putting on performances one couldn’t dream of.

Conclusion #2

Under the proper rules and regulations and proper testing times, steroids can only be beneficial for athletes. For the enjoyment of the sport one writer (Tom Verducci) puts it best when he said, “In 1998 a 70-year-old man would have seen a major-leaguer hit 60 home runs in a season only once in his lifetime. By the time the man was 74, the feat had occurred six more times, all by players accused in the court of public opinion of having used performance-enhancing drugs.” Clearly there can be no coincidence, numbers don’t lie.

Deadline #11 HW#1

Ironically enough the only worthwhile substance I got from this weeks reading was on the exercises on drafting introductions and conclusions. I've always had a tough time thinking of exactly how I'm going to start a paper. Conclusions were always a bit easier for me because I'm from the mold of end with a good quote. I think of all the types of introductions you can choose from, albeit straightfoward, is defining your argument. Recently my preferred method has been leading with a story, as I prefer something that grabs my attention. On the contrary I think ending with a story is a bit distracting as I feel as it would detract from your main points and leave the reader thinking about the story alone. The only other useful reading material was the chapter on plagerism as it reminds you even summaries and paraphrasing can be in the grey area at times. I only got the first and last websites to work and they were just categories you could click into.

Thursday, November 1, 2007

Deadline #10 HW#6

I went back to the grammar girl site (grammar.qdnow.com) and found that there was no new podcast, but her responses to questions. The most interesting question dealt with regular vs. irregular verbs in the past tense. I actually just used one in the last setence, dealt, the past tense of deal. The example on the site was dreamed vs dreamt. Others are like have and lay, instead of adding ed its ad and id accordingly. Another site I found this week that is kinda cool is called painintheenglish.com. Very similar to grammar girl, check it out!

Deadline #10 HW#2

Pampel, Fred. Drugs And Sports. New York: File on File Inc, 2007.

Best book found so far for the research project. The book starts with the earliest known accounts of doping. It covers amphetamines, steroids, blood doping, and hGH and other designer supplements. From there it covers the current testing policies and what players are doing to get around them. Although this project is only on baseball, it covers topics such as doping in the olympics, football, and collegiate sports. The most beneficial part of this book resides in the section called Minority Views in Favor of Steroid Use. This will be used to show some of the positives of doping in baseball, as most sources are clearly against steroids.

Canseco, Jose. Juiced. New York: Regan Books, 2005.

This is also one of the few sources available on the benefits of steroids. Providing dates, times, conversations, and personal accounts, Jose explains why he thinks steroids are a benefit to baseball players. As a user himself he explains how steroids enabled him to be the star athlete that he was/is. Mostly the correalation of his doping schedule and his output (offensive/defensive stats) will be used for this research project.

Deadline #10 HW#1

This weeks reading in Everything's An Argument was about causal arguments and proprosals. The chapter on causal arguments basically said that they aren't very good. It showed on you can either show how the effects led to a cause, or the causes led to effects. Although it outlined how you can form a causal argument such as the claim, reason, warrant, and then show the evidence while linking to another chain, I tend to agree with the book that these types of arguments are hard to follow and most of the times rarely facilitate an actual conclusion. The proposals chapter was covered earlier in the year as we have already written our research proposals :). The websites this week were really only 2 not 4 as the University of Lincoln Nebraska site and the maricopa site were not available. The other 2 weren't direct topics rather indexes of info that you can use.

This week was both productive and unproductive. As far as sources go I checked out 8 books from the library here and 2 from the tempe library. One of the books I got here is called Drugs and Sports, and not only does it have an overview of steroids in baseball, it has a section in the book called further research, listing sites and tips on how to obtain the most up to date knowledge. I have a feeling there are myriads of this type of book as it is called "Library in a Book", very helpful if you need more sources and there is one for your subject. Unfortunately although I have all of my research done, and all the pages/stats I will be using in my paper, I will not be submitting a WP3 draft due to my work schedule, and since I knew we didn't have class tonight I filled in for another shift. As Devon mentioned before about why not make 1 papers 2 papers, I am doing that for my speech class, also highly recommened if you're going to take a speech class, turn your paper into your speech!

Thursday, October 25, 2007

Deadline #9 HW#5

The cluster project was just a glamorized outline. The one thing I took from it though is it is very easy to see the connections you make for your reasons and evidence to your central idea. For example one new source of information I came across is an interview with ex ballplayer Jose Canseco who discussed how much faster muscles rebuild themselves with the aid of steroids. From there I drew a line from my evidence to my reason of faster recovery times to my central idea of steroids should be monitored in baseball because.... Good way to write an outline before actual writing one, highly recommended.

Deadline #9 HW#4

Claim- Steroids should be allowed in baseball under strict rules and guidelines

Reason 1- They help with recovery times.

Warrant-Faster recovery times means less time on the disabled list/more seasons played

Evidence- Various medical journals

Evidence- Personal accounts

Reason 2- They will level the playing field for those who don’t want to be a suspected cheater.

Warrant- Some athletes want to be morally clean and not be branded by the media so they take the high road and use the ability they’ve been given

Evidence- Personal accounts

Evidence- Media coverage

Reason 3- They will provide audiences with superb play

Warrant- More highlights (homeruns, wall leaping catches, faster pitches) produces more fans in the stadium, gives them their money’s worth

Evidence- The Sosa/McGuire slugfest

Evidence- Barry Bonds record

Evidence- Attendance records over the years

Refutations:

-Steroids break down the body as well as help

-Addictions

-Freak accidents

Deadline #9 HW#3

Well it seems like the foundation is laid down to start writing a few rough drafts of parts of my paper now. Writing project #2 my seem as a bit tedious of a step to throw in, but I feel it greatly benefited my writing process. I'm usually the type of person to do the paper/research in a weekend, but gathering most of my sources ahead of time will allow me to come up with a better outline for my actual research paper. I came in to the library probably 3 times since WP #1 was due to gather my sources. Most of the books were here but I have yet to check them out as I wasn't quite sure about which paragraphs to paraphrase. I think I'm most proud of writing a bibliography for the first time since high school. Even then, I'm fairly sure I never wrote an annotated bibliography. I think I'm most concerned about my annotations for my sources as I wasn't quite sure how to explain in detail about a book I haven't got to read yet (two of my sources were not checked in). The one thing I did learn/used during this writing project was the APA guidelines. I've gotten so confused over the years about MLA and APA and it was nice to have plenty of helpful sources such as the book and handout to make sure my sources were properly written. The next writing project is the big salami and I'm glad I gathered my sources ahead of time. The main thing I need to do for WP#3 is to keep going to the library and checking out/highlighting/paraphrasing material I will need as evidence for my paper.

Deadline #9 HW#2

I submitted my WP2 Final to turnitin.com

Deadline #9 HW#1

This week there was quite a bit reading to go through. Chapter 7 from Everything's An Argument discussed arguments of facts. One of the things that stood out to me in this chapter was how many times people go about creating a factual argument by looking for problems in the world. The posed the steps of 1. find an issue 2. research 3. refine any claims 4. sort through evidence 5. present your evidence. Chapter 8 was about arguments of definition. What I got from this chapter is that arguments of definition are fairly hard to support as they seem to be constantly changing depending on time-frames and demographics. The two main kinds of arguments of definition are formal and operational. Formal being a straight question and operational dealing with conditions. Chapter 17, fallacies of argument dealt with the all the ways we shouldn't conduct an argument. One of my favorites, which I have been accustomed to use myself is the slippery slope argument. Basically it states that for one action, you make a statement about possible outcomes, which are all assumptions. My other favorite was the straw man argument, where you attack a claim that isn't really the main point at hand, to make it look like your argument is correct. Chapter 11 from the Bedford Researcher just went over how to outline correctly.

Thursday, October 18, 2007

Deadline #8 HW#6

Well after finally scrapping up my written notes of my annotated bibliography I did upload it to google documents. Using the peer review function once again, I was able to see what my classmates bibliographies looked like, which in turn helped me. Although I uploaded my bibliography after class I forgot to correct it by alphabetizing it so I will be working more on it for next week. Being in class again this week was a big help, and the writing assignment on linking ideas together with an analysis proved quite helpful.
I posted comments on:

Stehphann's and Michael's D8 HW 4 (essay analyses)
Paulette- D8HW5
Kathy- D8HW3
Justin- D8HW1

Deadline #8 HW#5

Using the grammar girl site once again (http://grammar.quickanddirtytips.com/default.aspx) I listened to the podcast of starting a sentence with the word "hopefully." I tend to agree with her that while grammatically it is right, it should rarely if ever be used. Think of an actual speech or a speaker, using the word "hopefully" could diminish credibility, and for someone writing a research paper, "hopefully" should certainly not be used.

Deadline #8 HW#4

The article that Jon Pareles wrote on Coldplay was quite interesting, yet I do not completely agree with him. To me he seemed like an angry critic so his audience should be intended for music buffs. His purpose was to persuade people from listening to Coldplay and what Coldplay stands for. He envisions Coldplay as just another pop culture trend and does not appreciate their seemingly musical rip-off of Radiohead. Jon is clearly disturbed by not only Coldplay's lyrics but how the singer sings them. This is so subjective that he has no basis of where he's coming from. I think this article was not very well written, rather a rant of his dislike of the band. As far as the ethos/pathos/logos goes, the only clear aspect that is addressed besides his disdain for the band, is that instrument wise, they are fairly talented musicians. As much as he hates this band, I hate his article even more, where is his supporting evidence???

Deadline #8 HW#3

After reviewing Paulette's and Stephann's annotated bibliographies I realized my numerous mistakes. First and foremost I didn't turn in my draft until today. Paulette's annotated bibliography was definitely a draft and it showed. Her sources weren't properly cited and because of that, I need to make sure that my magazine/newspaper sources are entered correctly. Stephann had the problem of numbering her sources and not alphabetizing them, something I also did. I have not had any reviews of my draft but I have a good idea about what I need to change.

Deadline #8 HW#2

I reviewed Paulette's WP#2 and and Stephann's WP#2.

Deadline #8 HW#1

All of the websites for this weeks reading were designed to aid in a research project process. They mainly emphasized how to develop and and support a thesis statement. The ability to conduct fair research, i.e. giving both sides of an argument was also stressed. Finally the website from writing.colostate.edu offered different sources one can use besides the conventional book and internet sources. Nothing new, but never hurts for a review. As far as this week's reading from Everything's an Argument, the best chapter was the one on thinking rhetorically. It stressed to always asks questions when writing a research paper, such as who is the audience, what is the purpose, and what are the interests involved. Chapter 6 was pretty much just an overview of the different ways you can structure an argument. My preferred way is to make a statement and then give evidence.

Thursday, October 11, 2007

Deadline #7 HW #1

This week's readings were a bit dry but did offer some good reminders. Chapter 2-Arguments from the heart stressed the point that arguing points/subjects require mainly factual information, whereas persuading someone about your points/subjects requires more desire and conviction on your part. Chapter 2 also brought up a good point in that personal anecdotes are a great way to get the attention of one's audience and can keep their attention throughout one's speech/paper ect.. The other main point in the chapter was that humor on some levels might not only be appropriate but necessary when dealing with controversial subjects.

Chapter 3 went on to talk about people's characters and how it can affect how they are viewed by others. The three main areas that can be affected by one's character are their authority pertaining to subjects/issues, their credibility, and lastly their intentions or possibly hidden agendas. The thing I did like in this chapter is how it mentioned respect, and how it is essential trait one needs to have if they are to take opinions on issues. Not respecting the other side to your views can most certainly seal your fate in never being heard at all.

Thursday, October 4, 2007

Deadline #6 HW#2

By the way, I also turned in my final draft on turnitin.com, didn't know if you had to post anything on here. Thanks for your comments guys.

Deadline #6 HW#8

Well this week I made corrections to my research proposal and I am very appreciative of the comments/corrections that were made to my draft. As I mentioned before, I really like the capabilities of the peer review function as it allows you to not only see mistakes you have made, but allows you to hear someones opinion on what you have written be it good or bad. I am getting more used to using this blog as well, as it has really helped me keep up with the class work, which I was not doing in the 2nd and 3rd weeks of the class.

I posted comments on:
Kathy D#6 HW#7
Stephann D#6 HW# 3 & 5
Jared D#6 HW#3
Coralee D#6 HW#3

Deadline #6 HW#7

For this weeks grammar assignment I corrected my mistakes for WP#1 using Google documents peer review option. I also went to the grammar girl website (grammar.qdnow.com) and listened to the section on simplifying ones writing: Simplify Your WritingEpisode 73: August 30, 2007.

Deadline #6 HW#5

Chapter 16 in Everything's an Argument lists; observations, interviews, surveys/questionnaires, experiments, personal experience, and the typical reference sources you find at the library as evidence for your research paper. For my paper (Steroids in Baseball), I will basically only be using interviews and reference sources. If I can find some surveys such as, "How many pro ballplayers do you think use performance enhancing drugs?", then I will certainly try to incorporate that into my paper. However as far as experimenting/personal experience goes, I don't think I will be taking any steroids for an english class. As far as ascertaining interviews/testimonies I shouldn't need look any further than current published sports magazines/journals.

Deadline #6 HW#3

Well so far this research process has gone smoother than I thought. I was definitely filling bogged down with the sheer amount of work that will be dedicated throughout the semester for one paper, but now I have come to terms. The research proposal for my paper in all probably took me about two to three hours to come up with. Most of this was due to the fact of trying to find/narrow my research question and revising the proposal once it was finished. I really like the google documents feature of peer reviewing, I have never used it before/knew it existed, and it is very helpful. The main issue I am having currently with my research process is finding my sources/making sure they are relevant/credible. I have been bookmarking numerous blog sites and have been checking them daily to find the most current information. I do have to admit though, I have not been using delicious and I hope that doesn't count as a grade. Maybe it would be easier, but I feel more comfortable just using the bookmarks tab on the browser. For WP#2, I will definitely need to spruce up on my annotated bibliography as it pretty much just a bunch of sources with no commentary.

Deadline #6 HW#1

Chapter 4 in Everything's an Argument lists what exactly facts, statistics, surveys, and interviews are. Although surveys aren't really relevant to my research paper, interviews and statistics are. Later on in the chapter it refers to how many people make mistakes with assumptions, and reminds us to use good judgement when collecting data for papers. The paragraph on the degree of an argument was enlightening as I do tend be one of those people that asks for example, "Well Subway has subs for 5 bucks, so Quiznos should too." Chapters 16 and 19 was nothing new as what counts as evidence/sources was covered in the library demonstration/The Bedford Researcher as was the ability to evaluate the credibility of sources.
Needless to say its always good to have a book as a fall back example in case you are uncertain about your sources.

Thursday, September 27, 2007

Deadline #5 HW#4

Jost, K. (2004, July 23). Sports and drugs. CQ Researcher, 14, 613-636. Retrieved September 28, 2007, from CQ Researcher Online, http://library.cqpress.com/cqresearcher/cqresrre2004072300.

This article is excellent and was found using CQ researcher. It not only has pro/con opinions on steroids/supplements in sports but has information on particularly popular drugs used by athletes.


Bodybuilding, Drugs and Risk
Contributor: Monaghan, Lee F.(Author)
Publisher: RoutledgeDate: 2001
http://site.ebrary.com.ezp.mc.maricopa.edu/lib/mesa/Top?channelName=mesa&cpage=1&f00=text&frm=smp.x&hitsPerPage=10&id=10017783&layout=document&p00=Steroids&sortBy=score&sortOrder=desc

This source was found using Ebrary. This ebook lists numerous steroids/steroid accessory drugs with their benefits/consequences. Although this source does not pertain to baseball, the information on the drugs will apply to my research paper.


Sport, Health, and Drugs
http://site.ebrary.com.ezp.mc.maricopa.edu/lib/mesa/Top?channelName=mesa&cpage=5&docID=10054079&f00=text&frm=smp.x&hitsPerPage=10&layout=document&p00=steroids&sortBy=score&sortOrder=desc

This book is also another Ebrary book and others another insight to sports doping among athletes today.

Deadline #5 HW#6

I posted on Kathy's blog and Paulette's blog. Kathy was on par with me in the fact that the chapters in the Bedford Researcher provide good ideas for a survey, which I think is a great way to ascertain one's audience. I particularly enjoy Paulette's research topic as it is one that pertains to her everyday life. Although this process is entirely new to me, I am actually enjoying this new concept to me which is peer reviewing. I have a lot more to do with my research, but I feel with the myriad of information we have access to my research paper will go smoothly.

Deadline #5 HW#5

Since my paper has to do with supplements/steroids in baseball, the easiest place for me to conduct field research would be an actual baseball team. I'm not sure if MCC's baseball team would allow me to ask questions about the topic but if I could, it would be greatly beneficial. If I were to ask questions, which would obviously be a toucy subject, I would ask the players if they know of anyone in their past/present that has used steroids/preformance enhancers. An interview with the manager would also be beneficial, but I'm sure might not be quite appropriate as any incriminating information would be detrimental to the manager/team. As far as what I would be looking for If I couldn't conduct an interview, I'd look for the only things that could be obvious by eye, muscular structure and spectacular feats (i.e. homeruns and strikeouts.)

Deadline #5 HW# 3

I revised two classmate's research proposals, Justin and Stephann. Both drafts, like mine were written in the first person which apparently is definitely a mistake. My draft was reviewed by Paulette and Stephann and they both concluded I didn't use the spellchecker/grammar option by Microsoft Word. There is an explanation for this though, as I don't have word and I didn't take the time to type my proposal in the library, rather on my computer at home that only has a notepad. Besides my grammar/spelling issues it is apparent to me that I need to specify certain conditions/terminology pertaining to baseball as not everyone is as learned about the sport as I am. I realize I needed to spend more time correcting my own proposal as most of my mistakes were obvious. As far as turnitin.com and my originality review, which was covered in class, I learned that turnitin.com only highlighted terms that I used, such as HGH (human growth hormone.) This does not need to be revised as it is the name of a supplement that is pertinent to my research paper.

Deadline #5 HW#2 Peer Reviews

I reviewed Justin Winter's draft and Stephann Perizak's draft. Both are edited and the review sheet in class was filled out.

Deadline #5 HW#1

Well to be honest, I found this week's reading material quite bland. Chapter 6 was essentially covered on our trip to the library a few weeks back, the info is just written on paper. Chapter 7 was at least new material, i.e. how to conduct an interview for your research and how to write a useful survey for your research. The main thing I got from Chapter 7 though was in how you form your survey questions, the most importantly being make sure your surveys are very direct so that there is little or no questions pertaing to what is being asked. The paradigm site can be useful for grammatical questions but that is why I thought we had the Bedford Researcher? The other site was just stressing the fact that peer reviewing is essential in mastering your ability to write a research paper, or any other paper in that regard.

Thursday, September 20, 2007

Deadline #4 HW#6

Well let me first say, it sucks to be a procrastinator. Having waited up until the past weekend to buy the books wasn't smart, forgetting to post comments on every one's pages wasn't the best idea, and not having the completed annotated bibliography takes the cake for stupidity. I encourage you all not get behind as I am just coming to terms with the amount of work we have for this class (albeit it is fairly straightforward). I posted in 5 different blogs mainly about the proposal:

Justin's Blog Deadline 4 HW 3
Paulette's Blog Deadline 4 HW 3
Kathy's Blog Deadline 4 HW 3
Stephann's Blog Deadline 4 HW 3
Heather's Blog Deadline 4 HW 1

Although I find this blogging experience quite foreign, I have to admit that it is nice to see every one's blog as it can keep you from going clueless in what you need to do (although if it was a classroom full of me things would be severely delayed ha). Spending a two of the past few days in the library and using the online capabilities at home has been surprisingly advantageous as I thought using the online catalogs would take a long time to learn, but as I have found out the more you practice the easier it becomes. I really liked reading some of the topics including execution and gay marriages as I myself do have stances on both issues whereas on current event issues I tend not to take a stance. I will spend the next few days reading if anyone has found specific online search catalogs like CQ that would benefit me and my paper. Also since as I stated I was delinquent in not formalizing my bibliography I will be working on gathering more sources and posting that soon. See you all in class next week.

Deadline #4 HW#5

http://library.cqpress.com.ezp.mc.maricopa.edu/cqresearcher/document.php?id=cqresrre2004072301&type=hitlist

The above link is an article I found online using the CQ researcher. What I like about CQ is the advanced search option. This article isn't solely about supplements in baseball but does have several paragraphs dedicated to baseball. The article is semi current being that it was written in 2004 but I'm sure I can find more up to date articles/information within the up and coming weeks.

Deadline #4 HW#3

In the current age of professional and non-professional sports, athletes are finding ways to enhance their bodies. Steroids and other supplements such as human growth hormone (HGH) have been a major topic in the sports world. Most prominantly baseball has been taking harsh critcism from not only the media but the US government as well. The problem with these sports enhancing drugs is that they are so tempting to be used by athletes has they not only have the ability to strengthen their bodies in numerous ways, but possibly aid them in recoveries and their longevity of their careers. Since I am an avid baseball fan I am posing my research question as, "should sports enhancing supplements, most importantly steroids, be allowed to be controlled by licensed physicians in the current day and age of baseball?"

After the baseball strike in 1994, baseball as seen an influx in offense, resulting in increased revenue for baseball as a whole and more importantly the individual owners of the teams. In 1973, the American League adopted the designated hitter rule (DH), which allowed a hitter to take the place of the pitcher, which in turn increased offensive numbers in the American League. As most sports fans would attest, seeing runs/points/goals scored is more exciting to watch than no offensive output. Therefore there is an implied calling for increased numbers in professional sports, and in the case of baseball that equates to more homeruns, stolenbases, strikeouts and almost any other category logged in the game.

My goal of this research project is to address all the negative conoctations of sports enhancers as well as all of the positives with the hope of concluding in a happy medium of moderated sports enhancers. My audience is intended for sports fans as a whole, but more directly towards baseball advocates. However, since modern medicine has numerous uses for steroids/supplements in the normal world, my audience could include those interested in health professions as well.

Aiding me in my research I will undoubtedly be using numerous sports journals/magazines as well as journals/magazines that are health related as I will need background information on specific supplements/steroids. I plan on focusing on 3 or 4 supplements/steroids to have a good range of pros and cons for the use of each of them. One interesting thing I have to my advantage is that although I am only a blogger for the purpose of this class, I do read numerous sports blogs daily and will be able to ask myself more questions related to my research question with the ability to research on specific events/information. I also plan on digging up interviews with specific ballplayers to further aid me with my arguement.

This research paper will take a large amount of work due to the specificness to the sport of baseball alone, but I feel that will only be a positive as it will be more focused. One thing I will need to pay attention to during this process is the current events in the sports world as steroids/supplements are mentioned almost everyday. I plan on doing most of my research from home using the online capabilities of the library but will try to include as many books that are published on the subject to balance out my sources.

Deadline #4 HW#1

The one thing I really love about being a student is having the access to online journals/books/magazines ect. I can get very confused at times while in the library because of the overwhelming presense of information, so I really appreciate the searching by title/author/publication which you can do online. From chapters 8 and 9 in the bedford researcher I can definitely appreciate the criticism of a source as in the past I found when writing a paper a few years back I had conflicting data and I didn't find it out until the very last minute, resulting in me hand correcting my final draft before class. Needless to say I was docked a letter grade for turning in a "messy" final draft. I am still succeptable to biases and I do need to be aware of that while going into this research paper. The websites weren't necessarily new material to me but they could be helpful for checking any errors I might occur during the semester.

Thursday, September 13, 2007

Deadline #3

Right now I'm a bit behind on my blog but I did want to post that I have decided on a topic. Baseball is by far my favorite sport and it is very special to me. However the sport has been submerged in allegations about sports performing substances (i.e. steroids, human growth hormone) and has really brought about a negative image of the sport. Although I am not an advocate of illegal under the counter "doping", I would be in support of doctor perscribed substances for injured/aging players. I'll be researching this weekend and will post more soon.

Thursday, August 30, 2007

Deadline #1 HW 8 Help

I'm having problems with Google Docs. I have a mesacc.edu account and not an actual Gmail account. I'm not sure if it has anything to do with that but it might. I have nothing in my mail account associated with the class (eng102 7891). Any help would be appreciated!
~Brennan